Gmat Argument – City L Lifestyle (How to write GMAT Argument Essay – Example)

Another Argument from my archive:

 

“Two years ago, City L was listed 14th in an annual survey that ranks cities according to the quality of life that can be enjoyed by those living in them.  This information will enable people who are moving to the state in which City L is located to confidently identify one place, at least, where schools are good, housing is affordable, people are friendly, the environment is safe, and the arts flourish.”

 

Discuss how well reasoned you find this argument.  In your discussion be sure to analyze the line of reasoning and the use of evidence in the argument.  For example, you may need to consider what questionable assumptions underlie the thinking and what alternative explanations or counterexamples might weaken the conclusion.  You can also discuss what sort of evidence would strengthen or refute the argument, what changes in the argument would make it more logically sound, and what, if anything, would help you better evaluate its conclusion.

 

I do not agree with the author’s conclusion that City L will provide all the aminities to the new people moving to the state in which City L is located. The argument depends upon several assumption and insufficient data. I have listed down 4 reasons why I donot agree with argument.

 

First, the author doesnt mention anything about the sample size of survey conducted. Did the survey include all major cities? What if the the survey did not include the other cities which also provide all the stated aminities? More importantly, did the survey include all other cities of the state at least? If the survey did not include such cities then it is highly likely that City L can rank much higher  than it may actually deserve.

 

Second, how many total cities were covered in the survey? If there were only 14 city covered in the survey and City L was ranked at 14 then it shows that City L is actually not so better place as one might have assumed.

 

Third, the survey was done almost 2 years ago. The statement rest on assumption that many factors, which contributed the shortlisting city, might have changed. For example, a major earthquake hit the city 1 year back which destroyed the basic city infrastructure severly. In this case it will not be wise for anyone to move to City L until its infrastructure is revived. Hence such outdated survey data can not provide the sufficient info to make a choice.

 

Fourth, the survey mentioned 4 basic factors – good schools, affordable housing, friendly people, safe enviorment – that make City L a good choice. However what if the employment opportunities available at City L are not adequate? In such case it will not provide growth opportunities to the parents which can affect the standard of living of whole family. So these 4 factors are not sufficient to make a decision.

 

However, the author’s statement can be strengthened if survey sample size included all major national cities and hence puts City L at much higher rank in comparision. The statment can also be strengthened if it’s shown that not much has changed in the factors contributing the choice of City L above others in last 2 years. This improves the validity of survey. References to other factors to quality of life in survey can also help to make the argument much stronger.

Updates – Received 6.0 in AWA in Offical Score Card

Folks,

I got my official score card from GMAC. I got 6.0 in AWA. I am happy to see that score because I have heard some of the ivy schools do look for a good show in AWA. I have posted my last few essays before the GMAT for you all to review. Please share them if you find them useful.

More later…

[Updates: Please check out my blog posts of GMAT AWA Arguments and GMAT Issues templates]

Argument – Tourism Revenue

This was my last essay before GMAT

Last summer saw a 500% increase in tourism at seaside resort, and the national economic situation is even more favorable this year. This summer’s tourist boom will surely generate record revenues which will resolve our area’s economic difficulties.

The author’s argument that summer’s tourism boom will continue and it will resolve area’s economic difficulties is weak; it rests on many assumptions and fails to substantiate sustainable evidences. The author assumes that the growth of industry will continue this year. It also assumes that nothing has changed which could have proved detrimental to the area’s environment. It fails to justify how it could solve all economic problems of area. In following paragraphs, I will present these assumptions and weak evidences that weaken the argument along with the premises which can strengthen the argument. 

First, the argument incorrectly assumes that it will have similar increase in tourism this year. It’s almost impossible to achieve 500% growth in 2 consecutive years. What if the the year before the last was a disaster and hence last year when the tourism industry recovered the growth was 500% compared to disastrous year. This does not mean that tourism earned much extra money. At the same time it does not mean that such situation leaves enough room for additional growth this year. 

In addition, the argument assumes that local economic situation will be as good as it was last year if not better. What if a major tsunami occurred last winter which destroyed all the major properties of the area? If this had happened then the area will not attract more tourists this year even though the national economic situation is more favorable this year. 

Furthermore, even if we assume that all is well with the area and its tourism and that tourism will get expected record revenues, there is no strong evidence that states that these record revenues will be able to resolve the area’s economic difficulties. For instance, if the economic needs of area is in terms of billions, a few extra millions earned by the tourism will not solve the economic difficulties. 

However, the argument can be strengthened if it’s shown that (1) No unfavorable circumstances, that can lead to decrease in tourists, occurred this year compared to last year (2) Last year’s growth was not a recovery from loss but instead a growth because of improved tourist facilities (3) Credible economic survey estimates growth in this area’s tourism industry to be in excess of 500% this year. (4) The growth would provide sufficient money to cover all economic difficulties of area. 

To sum up, as cited in aforementioned paragraphs, the argument rests on weak assumptions and lacks solid evidences. Unless the argument is strengthened by additional premises, such as the ones mentioned in previous paragraph, it does not appear credible. Therefore, the argument is very weak for serious consideration.

Argument – Advertising Services

Our service, which includes both designing and placing advertisements, is by far the most effective in the industry. For instance, we recently designed and placed a series of advertisements of an apparel company using a golfer as a spokesman. Before the series of ads, a survey showed that only 8 percent of people who described themselves as non-golfers had heard of the apparel company. After the series of ads, despite the golfer making national headlines by becoming the youngest golfer ever to win a major professional tournament, over 80 percent of people from a second survey had heard of the apparel company.

The advertising agency’s argument is very weak and does not provide solid evidences to prove the effectiveness of their advertising abilities. The agency uses a survey result to claim that the apparel brand was a hit and assumes that the brand was a huge hit only because of advertisement. The agency does not even strongly justify that it was choice of golfer which made the brand hit. Thus, the agency’s argument is far too weak for serious consideration and fails to substantiate convincing evidences.

First, the agency cites a survey result to claim that the apparel brand was launched successfully. However, there is no more information about the credibility of survey. Who all were included in survey? Did they include only those people who stay near to the company showrooms? If so, it’s possible that these people heard about the brand because of their proximity to showroom.

In addition, the survey does not state whether the people heard about the advertisement but rather states that these people heard about the apparel brand. So, even if we assume that survey was done on credible sample size it’s also possible that the apparel brand became popular because of its pricing and quality and not the advertisement. Therefore the effectiveness of advertisement is not proved.

Furthermore, the brochure implies that it was the choice of young golfer as spokesperson which led to success of apparel using 80% of people surveyed as example however the claim does not include any information about the people who are not golf fans. It’s possible that majority of apparel brand customers are non golf fans and they will still not be attracted to brand.

The agency’s claim can be strengthened if it’s shown that: (1) The survey had credible sample size. (2) The survey includes people of all strata of society. (3) Majority of the people of survey stated they heard about brand because of new advertisement (4) Most of the people cites their enticement to brand a result of a choice of golfer as spokesperson.

As cited above, the agency’s claim rests of far too many assumptions and weak evidences. Unless its claims are strengthened by several factors as stated above, they do not appear effective. Therefore, I do not agree with agency’s claim of effective advertising.

Argument – school survey

I wrote this 3 weeks before GMAT.

A recent nationwide study of high school reveals that percentage of students who graduate on time is higher for private schools than for public schools. For this reason, Bedford Falls parents who want their children to graduate from high school on time should send their children to private schools.

The author’s argument that students of private schools usually pass on time compared with students of public schools rests on several assumptions and lacks sustainable information. The author merely states the survey results but doesn’t explain the reasons or justify the inference he makes. In the discussion, I shall present assumptions and missing information which weakens the argument along with the remedies which can strengthen it.

First, the author does not state whether the nationwide survey include all public schools. It also does not state whether there were enough number of public schools present in survey compared with private schools. What if the survey includes 99 private schools and only 1 public school? In this case, any summarized results can not be useful in making any judgment.  

Second, the argument rests on the assumption that it’s the private school environment which makes the difference in higher percentage of students passing on time. However, what if there are several other factors which contribute to students’ success in exams. Typically, those students who attend private schools come of economically better background. They may not be working while they are studying. In contrast, it’s observed the students of public schools work along with their studies. Hence they may not be able to give complete attention to studies. So, in this case one’s financial situation also affects outcome of study. 

Finally, the argument does not specify anything regarding admission criterion of private schools. What if they have a very complex system to select students for future classes? This way they are denying education to those who may not be able to pass such test. Consequently, this type of selection procedure ensures that private schools have only relatively brilliant students. On the other hand public schools generally allow even the poorest of poor to study. So the public schools generally represent all classes of society. Hence, it’s likely that they might have less percentage of students passing on time. 

The argument can be strengthened if the highlighted missing information is provided. It can also be strengthened if two equally brilliant students with similar background are chosen. One is admitted to a private school and other one is admitted to public school. If the student of private school passes on time and student of public school don’t then the argument holds true. If such experiment is conducted over a period of time and similar results are found then the argument can be stronger. 

In summary, the author’s argument lacks sustainable grounds and depends upon weak assumptions as described the paragraphs above. Therefore, I do not accord with the argument unless it’s strengthened by other contributing factors and suggested survey results, as mentioned in fifth paragraph. 

GMAT AWA Argument Template

I have received several emails requesting AWA template. Here’s my AWA argument template. [Also check out GMAT AWA Issue template]

Author’s argument that … is weak; it rests on many assumptions and fails to substantiate sustainable evidences. The argument assumes that – point 1 of paragraph 1 –. The argument doesn’t justify that (weak evidence)… In the following paragraphs, I shall present these assumptions and weak evidences that weaken the argument along with the additional premises which can strengthen the argument.

First, the argument… present your first point. Follow it by example. DO NOT REPEAT THE ARGUMENT STATEMENT.

In addition, present your second point. Again, don’t repeat the argument statement.

Furthermore, the statement implies that… third point (a weak evidence).

However, author’s argument can be strengthened if it’s shown that… Present at least 2 additional premises that can help to bolster its claim. You can use points like (1), (2). This shows that you are more organized.[You can write the following paragraph without even thinking what the argument is about!]

To sum up, as cited in aforementioned paragraphs, the argument lacks solid evidences and depends upon weak assumptions. Unless its claims are strengthened by additional premises, such as the ones mentioned in previous paragraph, it does not appear credible. Therefore, the argument is weak for serious consideration.

I am sure this is not the best of the templates but I believe that following this structure shows that you are organized and will keep you away from any AWA fears.